Wednesday, February 18, 2009

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Hearts pounding, sweat dripping
Crowds screaming, lights flashing
You wait for it to begin
“Are you nervous”
“No, not at all” You turn around and see the people entering the arena on the little TV
“Umm maybe a little nervous”

Choreography rehearsed, Songs run through
Costumes put on, hair done
“It’s it time yet?”
Jokes cracked in an attempt to reduce the growing tension
Small talk with the cameraman
“This is going on the DVD?! Really!”

Palms start to sweat as you put on your shades
“It’s starting!”
You huddle together
“Lets go out there and have fun! Ganbatte kudasai!” (Let’s work hard!)
You head toward the stage, as the roar of the crowd gets louder
Feeling the adrenalin run through you

Hearts pounding, sweat dripping
You walk out on to the stage
The first few notes of the opening number begin
Any inhibitions you had fade away
You grip your mic tighter
Here we go again

2 comments:

  1. Very well written! i loved it, and am thoroughly impressed!

    You get a star for great writting and a bonus star for pure awesomeness!!

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  2. Try removing the ing from your verbs

    Pounding becomes pounds, dripping becomes drips

    Verbs that end in ing tend to sound more passive and have less impact.

    Choreography rehearsed, Songs run through--I would edit this line

    Maybe more effective description of that sensation of walking out on stage-lights, noise, heat etc.

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